New version of energetic piece

Discussion in 'Member's Compositions' started by ryst, Jan 11, 2019 at 1:04 AM.

  1. ryst

    ryst www.nathandanielmusic.com

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    Hello,

    I posted this maybe a year or two ago but it wasn't finished. I finally revisited it to give it a final mix and added a few elements I thought it needed to "bring it on home".

    Anyway, feedback on the track and mix is much appreciated. Thanks!

     
    Last edited: Jan 12, 2019 at 4:22 PM
  2. scottbuckley

    scottbuckley Active Member

    Very cool - love the setup! I didn't expect the driving epic middle section, but it somehow works quite well! I noticed a bit of compression squishiness around 1:31, but other than that it's pretty great. Thanks for sharing :D
     
  3. tehreal

    tehreal Active Member

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    My honest opinion is that I was very enchanted in the beginning but when it evolved by immediately being repeated with aggressive epic orchestration I became confused. Not saying it can't go epic at some point but if you worked the phrases some more to do add some evolution via thematic/harmonic variation, etc. while keeping the orchestration small it may be more grabbing. Overall nice work though.
     
  4. jbuhler

    jbuhler Senior Member

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    Like the the others I found the opening catchy and enchanting but was surprised by the epically inclined middle section. That kind of change might work in a dramatic context where the motivation for the shift would come from the action but as a stand alone piece the middle is a bit puzzling—though it works well enough. Then, too, the return of the beginning at the end makes it seem as though the epic middle was of little consequence. Again, I can see it working in a dramatic context but on its own it's less clear what the piece is doing.
     
  5. Vladimir Bulaev

    Vladimir Bulaev New Member

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    ryst

    ryst www.nathandanielmusic.com

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    Thanks for the feedback, guys. It's an interesting critique (tehreal & jbuhler). I come from a rock background and more and more often, the rock and experimental stuff I write is, well....more experimental. I often like to change directions when I'm writing and go in unanticipated directions. But it's all subconscious anyway as I have zero formal training and I just follow my instincts. So I use that same intuition when I'm writing orchestral or film score stuff. I don't know the rules so I just make up my own. I guess that can have both a positive and negative effect.

    Anyway, I appreciate the criticism as I'm always wanting to improve!
     
  7. Amicus

    Amicus New Member

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    I really enjoyed this one. I definitely found the intimate vs the epic parts to be an odd juxtaposition, but I honestly quite liked it. Charming and intense at the same time, which is strikes me as being tricky to pull off. :)
     
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    ryst

    ryst www.nathandanielmusic.com

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    Thanks Scott. That was bugging me too. I realized I had the accidentally had the cymbals going through the perc bus and it was getting over compressed. Fixed!
     
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    ryst

    ryst www.nathandanielmusic.com

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    Thank you, Amicus!
     

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