I imagined a birth of a planet, or something like that. Hope u like it. Comments are welcome.
Thank you for sharing. Well my opinon..
for a planet that was a quick birth, right?..
For me there is hard to make kind of intention with the track.
The vocals in the beginning are bit very loud in comparison the rest. But that is a technical kind of nature. Put them 2-3 db quiter..and that it works better with the build up.
Your idea on the vocals is nowhere again in the track, so the intro becomes obselete to me, maybe as an effect what you were after?
Atmosphere is good. The Dm tonality feels not really going somewhere..you are setting that vibe there and the french horns are blasting..ending on the A major which liked. You could maybe wrap that structure a bit up.
Apart from that: Keep on going.