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5 weeks now - will anyone listen and give feedback?

Discussion in 'Member's Compositions' started by Mads Skønberg, Sep 8, 2017.

  1. Mads Skønberg

    Mads Skønberg Senior Member

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    Now it is 5 (or maybe 6 weeks) since I started making this kind of music. I will call my music Epic soundtrack/trailer/filmmusic.

    I would be very happy if you will listen and tell me what you think about my piece. Thanx!

     
  2. sekkosiki

    sekkosiki Senior Member

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    You've definitely made progression :). Some observations:
    • The piano is very quiet, it's supposed to carry the melody in the beginning, but it gets drowned by the background strings.
    • I would take the crash in the start away.
    • The drum hits in 0.24, 0.29 and 0.34 sound a bit strange, maybe they are too loud compared to the melody and the background.
    • The choir gets a bit drowned in the mix too. Maybe you could make the mixing especially in the chorus part clearer.
    • I would like a bit more development in the melody. The chorus is very similar to the melody in the beginning and there's just a different part at 0.57, which is good. For your next song try experimenting and developing the theme even more. E.g. what I sometimes do is that I have a rhythmic idea in the beginning, and a melody, but I'm not repeating the melody in the chorus, but e.g. I'm utilizing the same rhythmic idea and parts of the melody
    Hope these help.
     
  3. whitewasteland

    whitewasteland Senior Member

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    That's a beautiful theme, Mads. I'm hearing some harmony issues here and there (at 0:52 for exemple), and the rythmic signature is quite confusing : the piano theme looks clearly 3/4, but when the percs or the string ostinato comes in, it's 4/4. My advice would be to make a choice here, I can't bang my head like the metalhead I used to be ;)

    Otherwise, again, beautiful theme ! Seems like you're inspired and productive, keep up the good work !
     
  4. CGR

    CGR Pianist/Composer/Arranger

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    I concur with the above points. I'd suggest letting the piano state & reinforce the theme solo to begin with, and layer from there. The crash and strings just get in the way initially. Don't be afraid to make a simple musical statement without feeling the need to embellish straight away. And yes, the 3/4 - 4/4 mix is confusing and jarring for this type of piece. The ideas are there for a really nice theme, but less is more I think in this case.
     
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    Mads Skønberg

    Mads Skønberg Senior Member

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    Thanx everyone. This is very good feedback for me.

    I have tried to make some changes into the piece. The 3/4 4/4 issue is on purpose. I think it is making the piece more interesting, but I understand I might be wrong here:)

    Here is the piece incl the changes.

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  6. matolen

    matolen Senior Member

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    I listened to the original and reworked and I definitely think the revised version is better, and more cohesive. Good job!
     
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    Mads Skønberg

    Mads Skønberg Senior Member

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    Thanx.

    I finally managed to make some music again..

    Please listen and tell me about this track:

     
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  8. matolen

    matolen Senior Member

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    I like the violin/strings line. I want to hear it more before the drum beds come in actually. It would be interesting to hear a more traditional or mellow orchestration with it at some point (thats just my taste of course).
     
  9. Desire Inspires

    Desire Inspires Senior Member

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    Are you going to submit your music to any music libraries?
     
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    Mads Skønberg

    Mads Skønberg Senior Member

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    Is it Good enough?

    And how do I do that?
     
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    Mads Skønberg

    Mads Skønberg Senior Member

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    BTW I am working with a new song now. Here is how far I have come until now:

     
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  12. C-Wave

    C-Wave Senior Member

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    Nice, melody wise ok, keep going.. btw, if the violin probably a notch higher would make it more effective as it's the main melody.
     
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  13. C-Wave

    C-Wave Senior Member

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    I like it.. would have preferred adding (more) bass drums for more oomph! Bells too at the end would stand a little higher resounding end.. just a little!
     
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  14. Desire Inspires

    Desire Inspires Senior Member

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    Yes, it's good enough.

    Submit to Gothic Storm. Just send them a few Soundcloud links of your best work. Go for it!

    https://www.gothic-storm.com/#contact
     

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