AdamAlake
Music Person
Been working on this minimalistic strings + piano piece, need some feedback to really bring it home.
I think there's nothing that you did wrong per say, but the theme doesn't speak to me emotionally. Your intentional mix of soaring lines and playful shorts leave me not sure what to feel. However, I can see this working well with the right kind of visual, which is the case a lot of times in film music. The piano chord at 0:59 seems a little redundant to my ears. The 7th chords you use towards the end seem like they're not coming from the same sound world.
I don't love the theme itself, but it's a matter of taste and I don't think you should be too concerned about that. Your opinion and your client's opinion matter the mostGood points. I am making the piece for use with visuals, but I would still like it to be able to stand on its own, would you say the problem is with the theme itself, or with the way it is performed by the violin?
I will remove that one chord, it does indeed serve little purpose.
Nice!
I thought that the piano sound wasn't quite right with a really strong attack and not much sustain?
I don't love the theme itself, but it's a matter of taste and I don't think you should be too concerned about that. Your opinion and your client's opinion matter the most
Been working on this minimalistic strings + piano piece, need some feedback to really bring it home.
Hey Mate,
Just a little suggestion: you can take a bit more time with your intro. Actually you jumped into pretty quick into your theme which is fine. but you can milk the first piano thing a bit more. It is a stylistic thing and not mandatory but I thought so. So for instance you could start with the piano, introduce slowly the next element like the high Vln Harmonics and then after 2 more bars go into the theme with the cello etc.Sometimes I feel the melody is a bit occupied with notes. The first minute can have with such style of music less amount of notes imo. You don´t need so many passing tones. Passing tones are effective when used at the right spot. Sometimes I feel there are too many here. Otherwise it is cool and melodic and carries, but you know what I mean?
What is that crackling at the end? :D
Overall a cool short emotional piece, the little resume for me: Take a bit more time (not that I do that always right, you know my stuff :D)
That's hard to say. All I can say is it doesn't have a "global hit" type of theme (John Williamsy) that everyone will love.do you think people generally will not like the theme?
Hey Mate,
Just a little suggestion: you can take a bit more time with your intro. Actually you jumped into pretty quick into your theme which is fine. but you can milk the first piano thing a bit more. It is a stylistic thing and not mandatory but I thought so. So for instance you could start with the piano, introduce slowly the next element like the high Vln Harmonics and then after 2 more bars go into the theme with the cello etc.Sometimes I feel the melody is a bit occupied with notes. The first minute can have with such style of music less amount of notes imo. You don´t need so many passing tones. Passing tones are effective when used at the right spot. Sometimes I feel there are too many here. Otherwise it is cool and melodic and carries, but you know what I mean?
What is that crackling at the end? :D
Overall a cool short emotional piece, the little resume for me: Take a bit more time (not that I do that always right, you know my stuff :D)
I think the theme itself is ok. Sounds like a melancholic Irish folk think. Associates landscape and the title fits to it. But the piano has an indoor sound like a good middleclass doughter a century ago playing for the guests before dinner. The sounds doesn't really match. They bring out the midi world more than covering it. The themes performance need a bit more musicalitiy (too whashy and not enough emotion for my taste, especially the flute) and the piano maybe another room and more of a comping function.
That's hard to say. All I can say is it doesn't have a "global hit" type of theme (John Williamsy) that everyone will love.